As far as interesting story content goes I think you've included stories far more eye-popping than this.
You guys took over a minute and a half to tell a story that should have just been a VOSOT in my opinion. I say this because a lot of your video wasn't that compelling. Aside from the ground-breaking and fire dept. b-roll, there was a lot of projection screen wallpaper video, which if you have to use it, works better in a VOSOT.
10 seconds in there was a jump cut. You can see the first SOT in the shot just before her bite as she's sitting next to the mayor.
Was not crazy about the white flashes used between SOTS here. Used elsewhere I think they work, but for whatever reason I just don't think they did in this story.