Nice job.
Well composed shots...
I thought the nats felt a little forced... Here's what I mean.
I'm no editing genius so take my advice it for what it's worth, but when the guy put the box infront of your camera, I would have started the shot over the lady's soundbite. The "nat" was too long. I'd like to hear the crash of the red box right as her soundbite ended. (i'm talking about podding it up exact frame that it ends) It took at least a full second, maybe longer, to hear it the actual "nat"
Same with the truck and the phone call.
It might be smoother if the *ring* of the phone was heard underneath the end of her soundbite. You do hear it while she is up, but she's done talking already.
The truck seemed to be too long as well and it just appeared out of no where. I would have the audio start before you see the truck.
Maybe start the package with the wide shot of the truck instead of the talking head.
Good job. You have a good eye.