Not justifying, just explaining to (hopefully) lead to tips on how I can improve...
My gosh, it's a firestorm and your guy is a slow, monotonous, unemotional drone. I'm not saying he should be screaming, but a little inflection and some energy would have been nice. I know you can't help this, but it didn't help you.
Heh. I am the reporter... and one of the things I always worry about is sounding too excited over a story like this. I slowed it down and tried to let the emotions I was feeling get into it. Sounds like I may have inadvertently done the opposite.
I was there seeing all this... and I tried to fit my track with how I felt. The goal of the story was to take people there, since we had followed police, fire and the residents so closely.
The package was too long. This may be a function of a FOX hour long newscast or a newbie reporter, but there was a ton of fat that could have been cut off the package in the form of breakout Vo's and vo/sots.
This was a bad call on my part -- we wanted 1 pack to cover the "last night" aspect, and then everything else was "today". It's our half-hour, 10 pm show -- nearly 12 hours after the fire happened. It's our only weekend show.
Another aspect of this was the idea of not just doing it as a traditional story, but including the longer nats (walking, firefighters and police talking) to "take people there" and kind of put them in the middle of it.
One thing I really regret is not getting any sound from the crowds of people. The people I talked to either started crying uncontrollably, yelled at me to get away, or (in one case) nearly started a riot -- so police asked us not to go into the crowd.
I really hate the stand-up. Security wouldn't let us close, we had to shoot it during the day, and I just tried to include too much info (this is a pack-wide problem).
I was on my 24th sleepless hour when the fire was over, and we couldn't shoot anything in the morning (I would have had to wait another 3 hours, minimum)... this is why the stand-up was during the day.
Alot of the video was good looking video but I would have wanted to see it more on sticks and more detailed up close shots of the people on the side walks.
I shot most of the fire video on sticks, the only time I took it off was to follow the people (and when we were evacuated). The cop video was shot when I first walked up -- they didn't even have water on the fire at that point, and I was trying to get the cops kicking the doors in. Crowd shots, again, caused some issues. 1000 some people, less than 10 cops -- they (and we) were worried at the responses we got every time we turned the cameras around.
Later on in the pkg you talk about people being ok, where is the people that are ok at? Wheres the hole in the fence that you mentioned? I don't know what kind of conditions you were in it seemed like you were able to move pretty freely, but I would have liked to see that.
They wouldn't let us back there -- we were evacuated. That entire section was full of fire trucks, and all those buildings burned. The off the shoulder shot of the burning building is what we saw as we were led away -- then they decided to cut the hole in the fence after they saw what we were going through.
And glad to hear from you, Jason! I wouldn't ask for advice if I didn't expect it.
I'd like to think that if I had allowed myself more time (and hadn't needed as much time to recuperate), I could have done a better job. I may recut it just to make myself feel better...