Bowling
I thought the bowling story was okay. Kind of pedestrian, but not bad. First, if you feel you must open with the panning shot, let it start, let it stop. Also, just one stand light in that room would have made an immense difference in quality. However, there were some pretty good natural moments throughout the piece. And, I say it early, I say it often- More tight, TIGHT, TIGHTS.... This was composed of mostly medium to medium cuts.
Finally, I did enjoy the standup. You put some thought into this, and I though it worked pretty well. It shows your ability to be creative. But, my only thought on this is concerning the last shot. Just me being picky but... I thought the last shot should have been a tight, screen only shot (with the same video that you did use, on the screen), w/o the dissolve. What a transition that would have been, in my opinion... if that makes sense?
Anyway, pretty good stuff. Keep the creative juices flowing!