It seems like the reporter here REALLY wanted to make sure she was in the story starting with the opening shot. I would have liked to see and hear less from her and more nats and sots of the people carrying out the mission. (they are the story right?) I've done one of these and there is a lot of communication and interaction between crew members that gives you a sense of urgency. I also would have lost the second stand up instead of forcing something that didn't work technically. I was completely taken away from the scene as I focused on keeping up with the caption.
These planes are tough because you can't get away from the noise but what you can do next time is either plug into the com system or put a mic in a headset, tape it shut and do the interviews on the plane this way. Also, if possible you can try to do some of the interviews on the ground away from the noise which will give you some clean sound you can run under broll of your subject at work.
One last thing, I would have probably gone with a dichlo on the toplight and a daylight or 4.8k balance since the interviews looked a little orange and the background a little blue, but I thought the overall shooting and editing were nice and it was a good story, especially for a same day turn. These are a lot of fun because most people don't ever get to do this kind of stuff (without enlisting!) so I hope you enjoyed it...
Thanks for sharing,
GOODFOOT