As for visually, I would have loved to heard from her parents, sibling, seen her in a class room interacting with others besides on the court. I never saw her dealing with anyone. I would have liked to have felt some intensity in her demeanor. I heard a lot about how aggressive she is, but the story felt passive.
The photography was fine, the edit was fine. The length was just too long. You have to find other "golden nuggets" or as John said,"Surprises" to keep me interested. Her story I'm sure doesn't stop in the class room or on the volleyball court. Does she volunteer, have a learning disability, tutor people, have a crack addiction, love foreign films, speak another language, anything. You started at volleyball, and ended at journalism. Then just kept going for a long time. If the reporter can't keep up then you ask more questions. Find out something interesting about her by talking to her friends and family. You might find she has a strange collection of scabs or dead insects. You don't know unless you ask someone else about her hobbies, and family will always deliver the funny dirt.
Good luck.