Well Mac...its not great but its not good either. I think you almost had it and what I mean by that is....and its either unintentional or intentional (can't tell)...but you established a theme with your dramatic lighting of the money, which was/is a good idea. It helps provide b-roll for something you obviously don't have...but you only used like 3 shots...and that's why I think it began to fall apart on you because I saw random traffic shots (and was like wtf?)...and then you used boring screen shots off a computer (I am assuming off detectives comp.) but when you put all that together in a pot...it just doesn't mesh well. In stories like these you need to get creative...so the idea with the lighted money was worth exploring more...then you add a creative standup...if you light the detective so everything "matches"....there's consistency in the story from begining to end...if not, then it will always look weird and off....so as a photog you need to take the art direction sometimes...grab the reins, explore, experiement and hopefully if you work well with your reporter it'll be a team effort to come up and maintain the concept throughout the piece.