Once again pretty solid work but I'm noticing the same issues technically and in the storytelling.
Watch your story with the sound off. Then tell me how long it took for you to get to a wide shot of any kind. Quite honestly, with my definition of wide, you never shot one. Everything was tight - tight - tight. Show some variety in your focal lengths and edit them from one extreme to the other in sequence. You have to give the viewer a point of reference. In order to take them to the scene you have to let them establish where they are... only wide shots can do that.
Same as last time with the main guy you interviewed. Show me how he was apart of the story with something besides the lower 3rd. I need to see him in the action/apart of the event regardless of his title... dad or not.
You had one focal length for him during the interview. Get creative. I believe in keeping people in the element not taking them in a room away from where everything is happening.
Every great story has great characters. Take the most recent YOU TUBE guy from Huntsville, AL. That story was horrific from a TV Journalism standpoint. But they found a great character and now the story is famous (of course for all the wrong reasons. But you get what I'm saying about having great characters?)
You have continue to follow your characters into the action. Leave that wireless lav on them if you can and let them run off with it and look for moments.
If you would have done some mic work in this story you would have scored countless moments. You also could have taken your lav and pinned it on someone in the crowd as the hearse was approaching. The crowd interviews were kinda weak because you guys never established them as a character either.
Story telling in this one was rough. I can tell that your shooting, editing, and sound editing is pretty solid. You need to concentrate on the things I mentioned and become a better "visual storyteller".
Good job though. You have great potential.. I can see it.