Nice job ... Cool PKG! Not sure I'd be able to do any better if I could even come close, but there were a couple of things I noticed.
The first nat pop kind of threw me off. I was expecting the pace of the story to pick up in that moment, but it went back to the slower feel and didn't pick back up until much later on. I did like the effect though.
Around the 3:20 mark it cuts from Sgt. Perry putting the picture in his pocket to what seemed like wallpaper vid. Sounds like you were on quite the time crunch and may not have had the vid or he may have fumbled with the pocket too much for it to be a smooth visual, but I might have gone with a couple more cutaways of him or the pic. It just seemed like we moved away from that character in the visual department before his story was over.
It took me a couple of times to really figure out the C-130. The first couple of times I watched it, it felt a lot like nothing more than drawn out transparency. Same with the beginning of the piece where the reporter talks about how you first talked about the brigade in the past. Felt kind of like transparency that could have been taken care of with a V.O. intro. Don't get me wrong though ... I liked this method. Much more meaningful than a couple of anchors referencing a past story. My issue is it felt like it took forever to get to the point, and once it did I lost all interest and completely forgot about everything before the 2:20 mark. It was kind of like watching a movie where the main characters are killed off half way through. One of them did pop back up in the end, but I had to put some thought into who he was. There was quite a bit of info and story thrown at me between his first appearance and the end of the package including a completely new character. A lot of that is writing though, and it doesn't help that I've gotten a little more used to not being able to do anything longer than 1:30. So I'm sure a lot of it is just personal preference.
Loved the wide interview angle with the gear in the foreground.