Please don't take this as harsh comments. Just honesty.
This looked like a story done by an editor. Not a photographer trying to achieve story telling.
I didn't like the wasted time and effort with the pieced together sound bites at the beginning. Digitally zooming into eyes or mouths adds nothing to the storytelling. It's an editing gimmick.
The music was too heavy. You were laying down shots that didn't say anything. They just filled black holes over the music but didn't mesh together to communicate an event or action. There was no sequencing that made sense to me. It was just an excuse to fill time with music...that was, to me, predictable in tone.
I agree with red coat about the abrupt audio. He hit the nail on the head about the transitions.
Frankly, the story is too long. Maybe it would have played better to me if you spread the soundbites out through the story better. They seemed lumped into sections and then the "action" didn't make sense to me. Hard to follow who was playing and what was going on other than a volleyball going back and forth over the net. I didn't know who to root for!
Were you just trying to see how many different pieces of music you could fit into one story. There were too many for me.
This looks more like a team keepsake video than a news story. The Star Wars team roll call at the end...I'm sure they liked seeing each name but as an average viewer...it kind of bored me.
Was this a news story? If not...is this new section of B-Roll going to be an all skate for any kind of video production? Are we going to see wedding videos here? Are we going to see more pieces like this that may or may not have been actually broadcast?
Just wondering.
Frankly this was a product produced by an editor using very average to less than average video.
Work on mixing it up better. Don''t waste time and viewers patience with editing gimmicks going close on eyes and mouths. I'm not a dentist!