First off, to the person who asked the poster of this video..."why did you post this video?" I say, if you don't have anything constructive to post, than why did you post that question?
As far as I can tell, this is a college student looking for some feedback from professionals about his work. He posted it in the "video critiques" forum and asked for people thought. So if you don't want to tell him what you thought, than just move on to the next video.
Anyway, now that I'm done with that rant. Your orientation video...
I'm not gonna beat around the bush...it looked like something any average photographer/editor could slap together in about 20 minutes total. But that's okay, because you're young and hopefully you'll get some tips from folks on this site that can help you develop your shooting.
First of all, I'll focus on your shooting. You need to use a tripod. Shaky shots just aren't acceptable at the professional level. You also need to get some better shot variety. Has anyone taught you sequencing? It's done by shooting a "sequence" of wide, medium, tight, super tight shots of the same subject or repetitive motion. Once you have shot sequences, when you edit them together in order, it will make the pacing of your video much better.
Second, audio...the only audio in the video was music. You should interview some faculty, orientation leaders, students attending, etc. This will give you sound bites that should definitely be in your story. Then, focus on natural sound. You had people playing basketball, people giving speeches, kids goofing around, etc. All this has sound that you should include in your story.
I'll wrap it up with storytelling. Every project, whether a news story or not, is meant to convey a message, a story. Once you've gotten a handle on shot composition, sequencing, capturing nat sound and interviews (do some research on lighting too, i won't go into it here, but it will help)...you need to learn how to take all that and tell your story. The music you used doesn't tell your story, and the fonts you used sort of do, but as a viewer, I don't feel like I'm there. I'm not engaged in your story. I need PEOPLE to relate to. Nat sound of all the activities helps me feel like I'm there. Personal stories of some of the students will help me relate to the experience. The list goes on.
My advice, watch a lot of the stories on this website to really get an idea of how compelling video, natural sound, etc help you FEEL the story.
Hope this helps and good luck with your career!