fire breaker

Latin Lens

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Nicely done. That's probably some of the best flame video I've seen in quite some time. I am just going to add an overall critique that can really help something like this for you in the future. Take the extra two seconds here and there in your intro nat opens to add some natsots for effect...giving us first hand info about what they saw, heard, whatever. May not work everytime but it can help in instances like this....quick bites like "I saw flames"..."Saw big flames and smoke". Just enough to draw us in but not long enough to impact story length. Way to be johhny-on-the-spot in an obvious tense situation.
 
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