I wasn't a big fan of the opening shot. It wasn't interesting and didn't show me much of anything except the outside of some building. And it lasted a bit too long. Good inside nats though... would have been good if you showed us small parts of the sewing machines to go along with it... The thread being pulled from the spool, hands working, a closeup of a face. Just enough for us to SEE but not really know what is fully happening yet.
There were a lot of opportunities for great sequences to be happening and I feel like you didn't take advantage of those. An interview shot went to a medium shot of a woman cutting, and then a closeup of someone else sewing. Repetitive actions like sewing or cutting are GREAT for match action sequences. I would have liked it better if you gave me a 3-4 shot sequence of the lady cutting fabric, or the woman hand sewing.
You use the nats of the machine going up and down a lot to break up your sots. That's fine, but it gets repetitive. I don't believe that was the only good nat sound happening at the time... put a mic on the table and try to hear the scissors, or mic someone up and just get them bantering. It's a bunch of old ladies in a room, I'm sure they're gossiping and chatting and laughing. Use those sounds to break up your sound bytes as well.
I'm confused about some of the dissolves. You use them in some places where they're not appropriate (showing the polka dotted blanket). That may be so it doesn't look so jump-cutty. If the only way you can get out of that jump cut look is to do that... I would suggest not showing the blanket up close more than maybe once. We see it in the interview, that's enough for me.
Whoa, that little girl is holding the mic in her hand? Thats kind of distracting to me. Was that like the only way she felt comfortable talking?
A lot of creative shots, good clean sound, and I like how you varied up the interview shots. It is a well shot piece. Good job